err, i don't have "one line" for this...
it was pretty good, but i think every aspect of it has a lot of room for improvement. this one sounds like it's got great riffs and everything, but it seems kinda simple. i don't, i guess it's just cause i'm really into leads. anyway, the biggest problem was probably the recording of the guitar. the drums were fine, but the guitar sounded extra distorted, or fuzzy and kinda muffled. just work on that stuff, and it should sound a lot better.